Drafting & planning - First draft feedback

For my first draft of my music magazine I received feedback from my peers as well as my teacher informing me on what aspects of my magazine are appropriate and others could be improved.

What went well...

• The masthead is extremely effective as it is attention grabbing and reflects the ethos of my magazine being edgy and bold.
• The use of bright colours to stand out against the black and white background is quite effective as it highlights the most important cover lines of the page
• There is a clear sense of synergy between the background of the photography and the artist
• The use of the house style also reflects the daring and edgy aesthetic I was hoping to achieve with my magazine
• the use of yellow for a puff to contrast with the majority of the front cover is arguably quite appropriate to draw the target demographic's attention immediately towards it

To improve you could...

• Use one or more photographs with direct address to show range within your artist
• The secondary artist/band could look more realistic or appropriate with the genre of music I am approaching
• You could try to use a variety of more fonts as in certain areas it is difficult to read or a font may be overused 
• The font within the double page spread is too large
• The text within the double page spread is too clumped up and seems congested, making it more tiresome and difficult to read.
• The main artist name is slightly too basic or common for a stage name for an artist.